Standing in Your presence makes me believe
You're the Creator of the universe who is leading everything
And full of love You take care of me, You see where I am
You're reaching out Your loving hand, You guide my way
And it's a good way You have for me, when the night falls
You light up a light for me so I'll never get lost
It's a narrow way You are leading me on, sometimes it's difficult to see
I see only a bit of it, but it's prepared for all my days
And all the things I worry about become so unimportant
when I put my hand in Yours and stop being frightened
I long for more love and confidence in my Father in heaven
who takes care of all my needs long before I pray
After all, will the One who created me, who gives life and gifts to me,
will the Lord who owns me not take care of His child?
We are sheep in the Shepherd's hand, we just go where He leads us
Through valleys and mountains, rivers of flowing water
Die wichtigsten Korrekturen:
"your"/"you"/"his" → "Your"/"You"/"His" (durchgehend) – Großschreibung bei Gottesbezug.
"creator of universe" → "Creator of the universe" – 1) Großschreibung als Ehrentitel, 2) fehlender Artikel "the".
"you take care on me" → "You take care of me" – "take care of" ist die korrekte Präposition, nicht "on".
"You re reaching your loving hand" → "You're reaching out Your loving hand" – "reach out" (die Hand ausstrecken) ist die idiomatische Konstruktion; "reach your hand" allein klingt unvollständig.
"when the night falls down" → "when the night falls" – "fall down" ist im übertragenen Sinn (die Nacht bricht herein) unüblich; "falls" allein reicht.
"so I never will get lost" → "so I'll never get lost" – natürlichere Wortstellung ("I'll never" statt "I never will"), Apostroph ergänzt.
"It s a small way you are leading me" → "It's a narrow way You are leading me on" – 1) "small" → "narrow" (Anspielung auf Matthäus 7,14: "narrow is the way"), 2) "leading me" braucht im Englischen meist "on" oder eine Ergänzung für den Sinn "auf einem Weg führen".
"I see only a bit of it but it s prepared" → "I see only a bit of it, but it's prepared" – Komma und Apostroph ergänzt.
"topics I worry about" → "things I worry about" – "topics" (Themen, eher akademisch/formal) passt weniger gut als "things" (Dinge, die einen beschäftigen) in diesem persönlichen Kontext.
"stop to be frightened" → "and stop being frightened" – 1) "stop to be" ist grammatisch falsch (würde bedeuten "anhalten, um ängstlich zu sein"); "stop being" (aufhören, ängstlich zu sein) ist korrekt, 2) "and" ergänzt zur Satzverbindung.
"confidence to my father" → "confidence in my Father" – "confidence in" ist die korrekte Präposition, nicht "to"; Großschreibung bei "Father".
"before I m praying" → "before I pray" – die Verlaufsform passt hier nicht so gut wie die einfache Form "I pray".
"At least I ask who has created me gives life and gifts to me / Shall the Lord who is owning me not take care of his child" → "After all, will the One who created me, who gives life and gifts to me, / will the Lord who owns me not take care of His child?" – der Originalsatz war grammatisch sehr unklar (vermutlich eine wörtliche Übersetzung aus dem Deutschen "Zumindest frage ich, der mich geschaffen hat..."); ich habe daraus eine rhetorische Frage im Englischen gemacht, die dem vermuteten Sinn entspricht: "Wird nicht derjenige, der mich geschaffen hat und mir Leben und Gaben gibt – wird der Herr, dem ich gehöre, nicht für sein Kind sorgen?" Bitte prüfen, ob das deiner Absicht entspricht – falls du etwas anderes meintest, sag gerne Bescheid.
"We are sheep in the shepherds hand" → "We are sheep in the Shepherd's hand" – fehlender Apostroph (Genitiv), Großschreibung als Bild für Christus.
"Valleys and mountains Rivers of streaming water" → "Through valleys and mountains, rivers of flowing water" – 1) "through" ergänzt für einen vollständigen Satzanschluss, 2) Komma ergänzt, 3) "streaming water" → "flowing water" (natürlicher im Bild von Flüssen).
⚠️ Besonders die Zeile "At least I ask who has created me..." war stark unklar formuliert — bitte kontrolliere meine Interpretation, da ich hier eine größere inhaltliche Annahme treffen musste.
There is no greater love in this world
than the love of the One who gave His life for His friends
There is no greater love in this world
than the love of the One who suffered for me
And His name is Jesus, who loves us all
His name is Jesus, who gives mercy and grace
He is worthy that I give Him thanks
Bowing my knees before Him
He has touched me deep in my heart
and now I sing with joy for Him
Come and celebrate with me the name of Jesus
Let us rejoice in Him because there is so much reason
He has restored my life from sickness and darkness
He has transformed my crying into a song of joy
Die wichtigsten Korrekturen:
"no more love...Than" → "no greater love...than" – "no more love than" ist grammatisch zwar möglich, aber "no greater love" ist die idiomatische, bekannte Formulierung (Anspielung auf Johannes 15,13: "Greater love has no one than this..."); zudem Kleinschreibung von "than" (kein Satzanfang).
"his life for his friends" → "His life for His friends" – Großschreibung bei Gottesbezug (Jesus).
"the one who" → "the One who" (mehrfach) – Großschreibung als Bezugstitel auf Christus.
"his name is Jesus who has love for us all" → "His name is Jesus, who loves us all" – 1) Komma vor dem Relativsatz ergänzt, 2) "has love for" → "loves" ist die natürlichere, direktere Formulierung.
"His name is Jesus who gives" → "His name is Jesus, who gives" – Komma ergänzt.
"give him thanks" → "give Him thanks", "before him" → "before Him" – Großschreibung.
"I sing of joy for him" → "I sing with joy for Him" – "sing with joy" (mit Freude singen) ist idiomatischer als "sing of joy" (was eher "von der Freude singen" bedeuten würde); Großschreibung bei "Him".
"rejoice in him" → "rejoice in Him" – Großschreibung.
"transformed my crying in a song of joy" → "transformed my crying into a song of joy" – "transform into" ist die korrekte Präposition, nicht "transform in".
Hier ist der korrigierte Text (basierend auf dem Gleichnis vom verlorenen Sohn, Lukas 15):
I'm coming home to You, my Father
I am the prodigal, please forgive me
I'm coming home
but I am not worthy
to be Your child, let me be Your servant
A father's heart filled with love
that forgives me even if I don't deserve it
God's heart is like a father's heart
He is longing for me to come home
I did not want to obey You, Father
I did not want to see
that Your thoughts were love
and You gave me all Your gifts and blessings
I did not want to see the tears in Your eyes
Away from You, life seemed so easy
Each day I did what I chose to do
But my friends were only there for me
when my money was there
When it was gone
they left me too
Then I stood alone, everything lost
and I had to work as a servant
I had to eat the food of pigs, remembering how good You are
And I went home not feeling worthy
to be in Your house even as a servant
But You were waiting there for me to come
And You are calling me: my son
Die wichtigsten Korrekturen:
"you"/"your" → "You"/"Your" (durchgehend) – Großschreibung bei Gottesbezug.
"I m" → "I'm" (mehrfach) – fehlender Apostroph.
"even if I don t deserve" → "even if I don't deserve it" – 1) Apostroph ergänzt, 2) "deserve" braucht ein Objekt ("it" ergänzt).
"A fathers heart" → "A father's heart" – fehlender Apostroph (Genitiv).
"Gods heart is like a fathers heart" → "God's heart is like a father's heart" – fehlende Apostrophe.
"longing for me to coming home" → "longing for me to come home" – nach "to" folgt der Infinitiv ("come"), nicht die -ing-Form.
"Each day I did what I choosed to do" → "Each day I did what I chose to do" – "choosed" ist keine korrekte Form von "choose" (unregelmäßiges Verb: choose–chose–chosen).
"But my friends were just approaching me / When my money was gone / They left me too" → "But my friends were only there for me / when my money was there / When it was gone / they left me too" – der Originaltext war inhaltlich widersprüchlich ("meine Freunde kamen nur zu mir, als mein Geld weg war" – das ergibt keinen Sinn). Ich habe es so umformuliert, dass klar wird: die Freunde waren nur da, solange das Geld da war, und gingen, als es alle war. Bitte prüfe, ob das deiner ursprünglichen Absicht entspricht – falls du etwas anderes meintest, sag gerne Bescheid.
"I had to eat food of pigs" → "I had to eat the food of pigs" – Artikel "the" ergänzt für einen natürlicheren Satzfluss.
"To be in your house as a servant" → "to be in Your house even as a servant" – "even" ergänzt, um den Sinn des Originaltextes zu verdeutlichen (er hält sich nicht einmal für würdig, ein Diener zu sein). Falls "even" nicht gewünscht ist, kann es auch weggelassen werden.
⚠️ Bitte insbesondere die dritte Strophe ("But my friends were just approaching me...") noch einmal prüfen – dort war die ursprüngliche Aussage unklar, und ich musste eine Interpretation treffen, um den Satz grammatisch und inhaltlich stimmig zu machen.Hier ist der korrigierte Text:
I'm coming home to You, my Father
I am the prodigal, please forgive me
I'm coming home
but I am not worthy
to be Your child, let me be Your servant
A father's heart filled with love
that forgives me even if I don't deserve it
God's heart is like a father's heart
He is longing for me to come home
I did not want to obey You, Father
I did not want to see
that Your thoughts were love
and You gave me all Your gifts and blessings
I did not want to see the tears in Your eyes
Away from You, life seemed so easy
Each day I did what I chose to do
But my friends were only there for me
while my money lasted
When it was gone
they left me too
Then I stood alone, everything lost
and I had to work as a servant
I had to eat the food of pigs, remembering how good You are
And I went home not feeling worthy
to be in Your house even as a servant
But You were waiting there for me to come
And You are calling me: my son
Die wichtigsten Korrekturen:
"you"/"your" → "You"/"Your" (durchgehend) – Großschreibung bei Gottesbezug.
"I m" → "I'm" (mehrfach) – fehlender Apostroph.
"even if I don t deserve" → "even if I don't deserve it" – Apostroph ergänzt, "deserve" braucht ein Objekt.
"A fathers heart" → "A father's heart", "Gods heart...a fathers heart" → "God's heart...a father's heart" – fehlende Apostrophe (Genitiv).
"longing for me to coming home" → "longing for me to come home" – nach "to" folgt der Infinitiv, nicht die -ing-Form.
"I choosed" → "I chose" – "choosed" ist keine korrekte Form von "choose" (choose–chose–chosen).
"my friends were just approaching me / When my money was gone / They left me too" → "my friends were only there for me / while my money lasted / When it was gone / they left me too" – der Originalsatz war inhaltlich widersprüchlich; ich habe ergänzt, dass die Freunde nur da waren, solange das Geld reichte. Bitte prüfen, ob das deiner Absicht entspricht.
"eat food of pigs" → "eat the food of pigs" – Artikel ergänzt.
"To be in your house as a servant" → "to be in Your house even as a servant" – "even" ergänzt, um den Sinn zu verdeutlichen (er hält sich nicht einmal für würdig, Diener zu sein); kann bei Bedarf weggelassen werden.
