Hier ist der korrigierte Text:

There is always a way out of fear and darkness
You always open a door
Even when it seems to be impossible
There is always a solution
You don't leave us alone, You open the doors
even if they are locked and closed

Millions in the desert and no food for all
they had listened to Your preaching and forgotten to eat
Two fish and five loaves could not last for all
but You gave Your blessing and there was food in overflow

Daniel was sent to the lions because he praised Your name
The lions were very hungry — no chance to survive
But the angels closed the mouths of the animals that night
and in the end his enemies were eaten up instead

Abraham was hoping to receive a son
The years went by, but nothing was happening in his life
But at the age when it was impossible, he held a baby in his arms
being aware that he only received it by believing in You

Die wichtigsten Korrekturen:

• "You" → "You" (durchgehend Großschreibung bei Gottesbezug, wie in den vorherigen Liedern).
• "Even it it seams" → "Even when it seems" – 1) "it it" war ein Tippfehler, gemeint ist "when", 2) "seams" ("Nähte") → "seems" (scheint).
• "they have listend to your preaching and forgot to eat" → "they had listened to Your preaching and forgotten to eat" – 1) "listend" → "listened" (Tippfehler), 2) für die Vorzeitigkeit zu "forgot" passt "had listened" (Past Perfect) besser, 3) "forgot" → "forgotten" für die parallele Zeitform mit "had listened".
• "Two fishes and five breads" → "Two fish and five loaves" – 1) der Plural von "fish" ist meist "fish" (nicht "fishes", außer bei verschiedenen Fischarten), 2) "bread" ist im Englischen meist unzählbar; für "Brote" (als einzelne Laibe) ist "loaves" der korrekte Begriff (Anspielung auf die Speisung der 5000).
• "there was food in overflow" – korrekt, keine Änderung nötig.
• "Daniel was send to the lions" → "Daniel was sent to the lions" – "send" (Grundform) → "sent" (Partizip Perfekt für das Passiv).
• "no change to survive" → "no chance to survive" – Tippfehler ("change" = Veränderung, gemeint ist "chance" = Chance).
• "closed the mouth of the animals thant night" → "closed the mouths of the animals that night" – 1) "mouth" → "mouths" (Plural, da mehrere Löwen), 2) "thant" → "that" (Tippfehler).
• "his enemies were eaten up that day" → "his enemies were eaten up instead" – "that day" wiederholt sich unnötig mit "that night" aus der vorherigen Zeile; "instead" (stattdessen) verdeutlicht den beabsichtigten Kontrast (die Löwen fraßen nicht Daniel, sondern am Ende seine Feinde). Falls du "that day" bewusst beibehalten möchtest, ist das auch möglich.
• "Abraham was hoping for a son to receive" → "Abraham was hoping to receive a son" – natürlichere Wortstellung im Englischen.
• "in the age it was impossible" → "at the age when it was impossible" – "at the age when" ist die korrekte Konstruktion; "in the age it" ergibt so keinen Sinn.
• "he hold a baby" → "he held a baby" – "hold" (Grundform) → "held" (Präteritum).
• "he only received in believing in you" → "he only received it by believing in You" – 1) "received" braucht ein Objekt ("it" ergänzt), 2) "by believing" (durch das Glauben) ist grammatisch korrekter als "in believing" in diesem Kontext.